Those two additional panel lines in the bottom panel are...completely pointless. They don't improve the flow of the page, nor do they make the page more interesting (which I guess was what I was hoping for), ergo: they serve absolutely no purpose and are merely distracting. The unedited ink lineart (the one that's up as a vote incentive) even had a third line down the middle, dividing the bottom panel into four equally large semi-panels, but that one I just had to go ahead and remove yesterday when I was proof-reading this page; it was far too annoying.
Usually I try not to go back and edit out any poor choices I've made in the pages, since the point of a practice comic is (for me, at least) to try all kinds of things, make both good and bad decisions and then let those decisions stand. If I were to go back and improve all the old pages (or *gasp!* redraw them) as the comic progresses, in the end it would just look like I never even made those mistakes in the first place. That's no fun for anyone! Personally I like being able to actually note when a fellow (comic)artist has improved at something over time, which becomes very difficult when redrawn or heavily edited pages start replacing the original ones. Not that I can blame anyone for doing that, if aRTD was meant to be the greatest thing I ever did, you bet I would be redrawing pages like crazy-pie, and that's probably something I'll end up doing now and then with SSSS. But for now: no hindsight-edits allowed for me! x<